Comments : Your Baby Angel ( future )

  • 11 years ago

    by L

    There is a small typo:

    and closer tha ever before

    ^^ Than?

    Looking ahead into the future, with optimism that's good, now that optimism must be use in the present in order to get to the future.

    I like the happy tone, and poems about mum's always move me. Mom's are the best.

  • 11 years ago

    by myonlymoon

    You started off very strong with "I glimsped into the future tonight" and ended it with a soft rhyme. my mother is single, so i always love reading poems directed towards mothers. i really enjoyed this (:

  • 11 years ago

    by Redangelwings

    This is a very sweet poem saffie. I get the sense that your mom is not there for you or hurt you in your past here. I also like the optimism here that you two can be a family again someday. The first four lines are great though as they build up the story. You want your mom to be there and you have the hope she will be. Closer than ever before. :) that line says a lot. Again I think you are not close at all but you will be someday. You should never look back but I like that line it fits so well here. You make a dedication to her saying that she helped you grow and gave you courage to overcome. .

    Your heart is a very fragile thing indeed and you don't really say what she was right about. But I am glad to see you can change. Your eyes I like too because they do a lot and can see how much people can change. You should be who you are no matter what but I can see your mother being proud of you no matter what. You can choose your own path in life. But I agree your mother loved you and it can change how your life turns out. I liked how you did this in a short letter form for your mom I thought that brought an interesting write to this. :). Great write.