A girl( Very short)

A girl who whispers her pain
With her head down in shame
Who hides the tears
Wishing she could just disappear.

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11 years ago
by Blood of a Lion

Definitely a five, great job, expresses so much with so few words 5/5
- 11 years ago
  by Aubrey
  
  Thanks:)
11 years ago
by Paul Gondwe

I would recommend you write 'whispers' and not 'whisper'...it should also be 'hides' and not 'hide'...but overall, this has been well written
- 11 years ago
  by Aubrey
  
  Thanks:)
11 years ago
by Aubrey

I'm trying to be more open......but it's hard....so I'm keeping them short for now.....I hope you like it....