by Wild flower
Sorry for not commenting before I didnt know what to say, but I really loved this poem. In my opinion it deserves a win in the weekly contest. |
by Chelsey
Geeez. I'm almost out of words for your poetry. Its so unique. Each one of them I feel the topic, the wording, everything about it is so creative and different. I am loving it!! |
I used to write a poems such as these,but fortunately they are came from a character in my mind, but when i read this, it feels like this one as happening (not to the author) but to the person I was once met past seven years...it makes me remember her, until the last lines of this piece...good work, i like this piece |
by Darren
This reads like a monologue, I could imagine a young lady perched at the end of the stage face in hands and talking in a sad tone. I enjoyed feeling the atmosphere, the 'forgetting your lines' is a very clever reference, I immediately picture somebody saying something they shouldn't in front of the rest of the family. This whole thing reads to me like a typical xmas get together that ends in a war and the perpetrator is ejected, yet we sympathise with her. A great reminder to us all that not everybody has such a merry xmas. It poses questions, is she really the black sheep? Does she get blamed for everything trivial? I think the way the poem is broken up into many stanzas helps keep the pace slow, which in turn helps with the mood. Great piece Baby Rainbow. |