I lovery this.....your really good.....keep it up:)

I lovery this.....your really good.....keep it up:)

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Wo wo wo ,,,these r powerful...evn stopped me to comment

This is romantic and passionate. A beautiful imagery it carries:)
Lovely!

I really enjoyed the simplicity of this poem. It seems very musical, and has a nice flow to it. When I read it, I feel very delicate. I really like how you can convey that feeling, so simply, and not overdone with blame.

Thank you

While I was reading, I felt I was slowly uncovering or unwrapping a gift. Taking off the ribbon, tearing away the wrapper and opening the box just to see what was inside. It was a short write but it kept me reading because I wanted to find out what was there to reveal. Another 5 from me. :)

oh btw, i think it should be "stare into each other's eyes" :)

'no need to
exchange promises or pen me a
little note yes you've left an
Impression upon this lost soul'

Very much like this stanza in your poem, it reaches out to one in the concept that words spoken or written don't mean as much as actions . .. . that's why? an impression upon the loved one is resided :P

5/5

Thank you

Let's peel back the covers
and stare into each other
eyes.

- adore this opening, it should read " each other's eyes" but it reminds me of the true conversation when you look into someone's eyes and you can see more than words could say.

Talk to me with your body
and push all other thoughts
aside.

- very powerful wording here, showing the connection between the two characters is so strong it does not need words.

Let's role play so that I can
make my first debut, turn the
lights on so that I can reveal
all my secrets to you.

- revealing secrets - this shows the trust in the relationship and how you want them to know everything about you and feel safe with the knowledge they will not leave you.

I only ask that you stay until the
curtains close. There's no need to
exchange promises or pen me a
little note yes you've left an
Impression upon this lost soul.

- I think you need a comma or a full stop between note and yes, as I read this as two separate statements. a fantastic way to end the poem because it shows how much this person has changed you and made an impact on you. You have been lost so perhaps you feel this person has rescued you and shown you another way to love, a hopeful future.

Great work. I also like the title choice, it shows you are willing to reveal the real you to this person. 5/5

Awh this is really cute! :) i thought actually of how love is like awww said unwrapping a present the present being love lol or rather a beginning of one! :) 5/5

Queen Ash

Wow im stunned i really liked this. It brings true meaning to Making Love. <you've left an
impression upon this lost soul.> my favorite line very beautiful i loved the way it flowed, it made me believe.