Chasing Dreams
by Amber Jan 5, 2013
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First let me explain, that im just caught up in this bad game. You see i'v wondered off to the dark side of my sane so im having a hard time finding my way. My mind just keeps racing but really i dont even know what it is that im chasing. I'v been here before and i'v been there to yet im still lost and dont know what to do. I close my eyes and count to 5 im letting go of all my fear hoping to see things more clear. I thought if you believed anything could be but then rEality came to me and thats when i could see. All along i had been chasing dreams. Dreams that could never be. Dreams that trapd my mind in misery and wouldn let me free. I try to block it out but in the end im only hiding from my own doubt. I knew nothing of what life was all about. Taking 5 steps forward and ten steps back. I let my life get thrown off track. I created this distance thats suppose to stay close. Loosing site of the ones who love me the most. Chasing dreams was only a joke. Turns out i was changing demons and dope. . . |
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11 years ago
by Amber
Thank you:) there was more to it. . There is an ending that i think pulls it all together i didnt have time to finish at that moment and i dont know how to edit it now that its already posted? And also could i change some of those i's to we's and they's i understand i have to many but do i just change them or try and rewrite it with out so many?
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11 years agoby Lostlove1
Needs shape Amber. Make this piece look beautiful to our eyes, and get rid of some of those I's :) too. Theres some good stuff in your lines and I think with a little tweeking you could make this poem shine. Lemme know if you want help via pm.
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11 years ago
by L
"Loosing site of the ones who love me the most"
On this line: I think you meant Sight instead of site?
Also on the part about changing demons and dope. .. is it changing or chasing?
Aside from that I did not expect the ending.
