"Loosing site of the ones who love me the most"

On this line: I think you meant Sight instead of site?

Also on the part about changing demons and dope. .. is it changing or chasing?

Aside from that I did not expect the ending.

Needs shape Amber. Make this piece look beautiful to our eyes, and get rid of some of those I's :) too. Theres some good stuff in your lines and I think with a little tweeking you could make this poem shine. Lemme know if you want help via pm.

Thank you:) there was more to it. . There is an ending that i think pulls it all together i didnt have time to finish at that moment and i dont know how to edit it now that its already posted? And also could i change some of those i's to we's and they's i understand i have to many but do i just change them or try and rewrite it with out so many?