by Maple Tree
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 The positive message within this piece is breathtaking Andrew... The rhyme scheme is spot on.. and I truly admire this piece~  | 
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 Thanks so much! They just come out, but sometimes you are surprised and not expecting what comes out, I guess that's what the poem is about!  | 
by Baby Rainbow
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 I enjoy the way you rhyme your poems, I can see you kind of started with one thought here and just carried on letting the next thought come also. Each line is like a different thought and holds its own emotion. Very well done.  | 
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 Yeah, I don't like the way it ended. I like to end with a bang and this kind of ends with a fizzle. The original idea behind the poem is how we fall short of what we plan to do and our life doesn't turn out how you want at all. But when I write the poems come out how they want sort of speak not necessarily how I want.  |