Such a sad piece...

The loss of an unborn child.
A soul that's very much apart of your life,.. For the rest of your life; yet never able to grace you with his/hers angelic presents.

"I lay here next to you
with death between us
carried in your belly
like doomsday's angel."

Extremely Sad but very intense start to a write...

Heart wrenching piece through out :(

I am so sorry Larry, the lose of an unborn child is so hard to handle. But may his soul rest in piece...

The poem itself was so intense, every word showcased a bit of what you were feeling.

God bless you Sir!
<3

Larry, this piece breaks my heart... the tragic loss and the week those two people had to endure is truly heartbreaking... my thoughts are with them and the rest of the family as well...

You have penned a touching poem... I'm not going into much detail and just how elegant the flow is, only because with this piece, its emotional message is so great... but the way you wrote this... allows the reader to be in the moment with them... not a dry eye, when it comes to reading this piece... very touching Larry and thank you for sharing...

I've looked at this poem...seems like forever now, trying to find something to say and the only word I can come up with is B******. Hey...you are a professional man yourself and...I wonder, in the past, did you have that "stick together thing...cover everyone's ass" like I feel doctors do before this happened? I sat in a hospital emergency department watching my first grandchild bleed onto the plastic seat my daughter was sitting on while I pleaded for a nurse to save her some dignity and bring her a sanitary pad...I was told ...if you don't calm down lady we will call security...like I said...B*******

Sorry...I got a bit emotional here...I told my daughter there will be more babies and now she has two...maybe you can hope you family will have the same happiness....I do hope so, not that it will ever erase the scars for anyone here Larry....

A very deep and sad piece of work, words clearly showing their emotions, mr larry a masterpiece it is 5/5
God bless you

"It is my brother-in-law and his wife dealing with this horror. The fact the doctors could not take it from her for a week was the cruelest part of it. "

^ I can only imagine the terror that comes along in this, the possible nights she would wake up from a nightmare that is an extension of a reality. This is almost inhuman, the suffering of knowing a future pain and grief; possibly worse than knowing before hand that a leg would be amputated or the eyes would lose its purpose -- at least for both one could still cherish the last moments. But for the mother, what could she cherish? The "doom's day angel" may have already been taken out, but the emotional pain, the dreams of what could have become, the phantom baby still remains. And this hurts.

I'm not going to comment on the poem's construction because I understand how personal this must be for you. The topic itself has moved me. I'm sorry that you were part of such tragedy. But if anything, I'm thankful you shared this, I honestly could only imagine such dread.

If it's okay to discuss here (since future/current readers might want to know as well), why should she have to wait a week for the operation? Sorry but I'm clueless on this kind of horrific case.

(Weekly Contest Comment - 1/14/13)

Larry, the only thing I'm going to say is that this write is so heartbreaking, its written with so much emotion, it makes the reader truly feel the pain of their loss and the love they had for their unborn child and for each other. My heart goes out to this beautiful couple for their loss and what they had to endure. (10)