by Let It Be Jan 8, 2013
category :
Dark, fantasy /
fantasy, mystical
A whisper urges me to turn my head, nothing. Alone in the Haunted Forest my mind wanders it was just the sound of the wind I ensure myself. It is frigid winter seeps into me through my toes not even my hood can fight its despair. The reason for me trudging in the woods you might ask. I am returning from a stay at my grandmother's house, I could have taken the short cut home, but I decided to go through the forest and see the wildlife. All my life I have never went into the forest; the people in my village are scared of it they say it's the shadows they stare at you. A creak of a fallen oak echoes through the forest, I feel the fear creep in and ignore is warnings. |
So so so awesome!!!I love how you wrote from each characters perspective, though it reads like a story, there is a poetic rhythm in your words.your descriptions of the boy, the forest and that wonderfully sensual love scene is magnificent.what an incredible twist to the classic tale of red riding hood, far better than the movie hoodwinked, what talent!! :-) |
by Meena Krish
Interesting story which was well thought out and penned. I got lost when the narrator changed but was able to pick up on it. You did really well in penning this..well done dear :) |
Great one! 5/5 for you! |
This is more like a story and it's really good sweetie!!! 5/5 |
by Let It Be
More like prose poetry |
I was reading this and I am just like...Omg O.O I love everything about it and it is one of my favs. 5/5 for sure. Love love love it. :D |