I love the way you write and tell a story :)

Hello :)

First off, I love prose poetry. It's a story yet poetic in a sense that a normal story is hard to achieve in some cases. The title is catchy, always good. And I like how you capitalized it. It makes it seem as if it is not just a mere haunted forest but The Haunted Forest. Adds a sense of depth. Keeps you wondering about the story behind the name.

"I looked closer focusing on the details, the boy was young bout the same age as me, his dark skin shown with wounds and fresh blood, pants was the only thing he was wearing and torn they were, he gasped and fainted." ----- definitely my favorite part in the first paragraph. Good imagery and I like how you used passive voice to describe the pants.

Ok..... took me a minute but I like the shift of the narrator at the second paragraph. Character development is definitely a strong point in this. And you did it again between the second and third. My only advice is to put extra space between each. Since it flows together, it's harder for the reader to grasp the speaker at first.

"My soul knew and begged for human life my morality had died the moment the old alpha did the same." This line... I like it. You really give the reader a deeper outlook on who the person is by quoting moral standards and codes.

Third paragraph [the granny one], last sentence, you should put a comma between "me" and "the".

"Somehow he was attractive his dark skin surprisingly warm to the touch, his dark eyes deep with mystery, muscles that would make any girl drool, lips that begged to be kissed, and dark curly hair beautifully tussled." Yum ;)

Last parts pretty... interesting ;P but good! I like how it becomes a twisted Red Riding Hood story... you get hints of it from the start but it's a much more sophisticated one.

Passion, pain and death. Quite the mixture :)

I was reading this and I am just like...Omg O.O I love everything about it and it is one of my favs. 5/5 for sure. Love love love it. :D

This is more like a story and it's really good sweetie!!! 5/5

Queen Ash

Great one! 5/5 for you!

Interesting story which was well thought out and penned. I got lost when the narrator changed but was able to pick up on it. You did really well in penning this..well done dear :)

So so so awesome!!!I love how you wrote from each characters perspective, though it reads like a story, there is a poetic rhythm in your words.your descriptions of the boy, the forest and that wonderfully sensual love scene is magnificent.what an incredible twist to the classic tale of red riding hood, far better than the movie hoodwinked, what talent!! :-)