High Noon

Ooooh my, this was a sensual piece! Is it hot in here, or is it just me? Haha! This is fabulous! I love, love,

My coal hair sways
against the arch of my back,

^this. It's a beautiful way to describe hair. I just have a thing with hair in poems. It's always used for pleasure, or hiding, or giving a huge amount of meaning to the speaker. In this case, it's pleasure, and

pleading to be yanked with pleasure -
a luxury you drink in.

^that, is great. The lover appreciates the hair as much as the speaker does. I feel like this is where the piece explodes and opens the door to a very sensual world. Fabulous!

This is... Provocative, to say the least. Not obscenely so. It feels like a quickened pulse.

I want to say that I've read this at least 20 times, but still the right words aren't coming to me.

Normally I would pull this apart stanza by stanza but something about this poem screams perfection. I feel like it's perfect, descriptive, creates an image and atmosphere, has personal connection and is simply brilliant.

I love how you created this with so few words, that even though it's fairly short you've written such an interesting, descriptive piece. Definitely one of my favorites.

Hannah I love your writing ! :) always writing how you feel love it!

I read this piece some time ago, at the moment I couldn't comment, I was unsure as if I interpreted the content correctly.. I have been reading it and everytime I read it, I am 100% about the content and let me tell you this is not entirely explicit. This is hidden and that's what I like about this piece. The ending ties eveything together, nicely done.