This was a really intense I love the
Description of cigarettes and addiction
The ending was perfect so beautiful

Really strong piece

Awesome

Very descriptive I like it. 5-5

Omg lately I just want to marry your poetry. Its amazing. I loved this...it almost doesnt have to be explicit just because its about the "dirty." I find it quite modestly written and avoiding all sense of xrated anything, its simply two casual, normal, people making love and I adore it.

The way you open up your stanza astounds me.....The cigarette...I hate usually, but I like how this was used here. Creative. Tastefully written piece Hannah. Well done.

First of all, am happy am in the same club with you, i have always loved your work..even hav some of your poems on my fav lists and this one dint dissapoint either.. i loved your descriptive tactics in this piece and the choice of words. Amazing.

I read this piece some time ago, at the moment I couldn't comment, I was unsure as if I interpreted the content correctly.. I have been reading it and everytime I read it, I am 100% about the content and let me tell you this is not entirely explicit. This is hidden and that's what I like about this piece. The ending ties eveything together, nicely done.

Hannah I love your writing ! :) always writing how you feel love it!

I want to say that I've read this at least 20 times, but still the right words aren't coming to me.

Normally I would pull this apart stanza by stanza but something about this poem screams perfection. I feel like it's perfect, descriptive, creates an image and atmosphere, has personal connection and is simply brilliant.

I love how you created this with so few words, that even though it's fairly short you've written such an interesting, descriptive piece. Definitely one of my favorites.

This is... Provocative, to say the least. Not obscenely so. It feels like a quickened pulse.

Ooooh my, this was a sensual piece! Is it hot in here, or is it just me? Haha! This is fabulous! I love, love,

My coal hair sways
against the arch of my back,

^this. It's a beautiful way to describe hair. I just have a thing with hair in poems. It's always used for pleasure, or hiding, or giving a huge amount of meaning to the speaker. In this case, it's pleasure, and

pleading to be yanked with pleasure -
a luxury you drink in.

^that, is great. The lover appreciates the hair as much as the speaker does. I feel like this is where the piece explodes and opens the door to a very sensual world. Fabulous!