Comments : Bases of success [Tanka]

  • 11 years ago

    by L

    I think this piece needs some editing... I am not sure what it means. The idea sounds kind of force.

    My thoughts however are that if a tree is move to another location it leaves no roots... but i think they do...

    so if one dreams are not according to reality or not possible to reach... then one should change them.. but I don't understand how is that related to the tree... if one changes the dreams the dreams will still remain with us.. they might not be our top priority.. but just as when a tree is moved to another location.. sometimes some roots are left behind.. and other times the tree dies if it was move to another location... So I guess that's what you wanted to say, that if we move to our dreams to something reachable then the other ones will die... or may be not.

    • 11 years ago

      by Khalid M Darwish

      The story is this: Everyone dreams to be better but he can have his dreams satisfied if they aren't against reality or basics because he shouldn't change his basics, The tree has a similar situation, every year it only changes leaves by itself (not necessarily by someone) but not roots.
      Thank you Luce for the comment.

  • 11 years ago

    by L

    I think this piece needs some editing... I am not sure what it means. The idea sounds kind of force.

    My thoughts however are that if a tree is move to another location it leaves no roots... but i think they do...

    so if one dreams are not according to reality or not possible to reach... then one should change them.. but I don't understand how is that related to the tree... if one changes the dreams the dreams will still remain with us.. they might not be our top priority.. but just as when a tree is moved to another location.. sometimes some roots are left behind.. and other times the tree dies if it was move to another location... So I guess that's what you wanted to say, that if we move to our dreams to something reachable then the other ones will die... or may be not.

  • 11 years ago

    by average thoughts

    Wow khalid..wat a strong msg..
    Specially, d last line is d root of uor poem.

  • 11 years ago

    by L

    For the trees change leaves not roots

    oh, then this line needs some comma

    For the trees change leaves, not roots.