Queen it's almost 22 lines rhymed altogether! I'd have to ask where did you find this style, or mai not be yours? It's fantastic write. Some stanza are 3-lines and some are 4-lines. This reallyt drive my attention and I personally loved it. Yet, still there're more rhyming words inside the lines like "say" and "ray". Your writing is really attractive. Keep on penning the same style and avoid to be in "astray". 5/5

I love the flow of "ay" at the end of each line. I enjoyed this!

Oh this style is MINE lol i had to do this since my freaking talent went away to the four winds!!! it just kept changing and i guess it was time for me to go from third/second to first and i am GLAD people like it! :)