by zombiepikachu Jan 23, 2013
category :
Life, society /
other
It's soft breathing while he sleeps |
by Rusheena
I really like this; it's very unique yet relatable. I love poetry that makes the words visible, opposed to portraying just emotion. Like I mentioned before, punctuation would help pace the poem and keep the reader's eyes from going wild, trying to keep, since the poem is structured the way it is. I really enjoyed this; keep it up! |