Comments : No Electrolyte

  • 11 years ago

    by Ares

    For me this is a decent read, with good lines and a topic that a lot of people could relate to. The only thing I want to point out, negatively, is that one can get the feeling that the whole sense "of being rejected" can get a bit repetetive through-out the poem and instead one could get a touch more creative. But, other than that, great work!

    -Ares