It Is Almost Winter (collab with Noura)

[Weekly Contest Comment: 2/4/13]

I was surprised by the poets' word choice, but that's what made this poem have such strong meaning behind the lines. There was a delicateness I enjoyed in the beginning, almost as if this mirror of one's life has been dusted with pleasurable memories, and now it is shown as a remnant, a keepsake of the past. I feel in love with these two lines to open up the second stanza "God is asleep and safe, time is asleep and safe", it's simple wording but to picture God as safe? I've never done that before. I imagine him having all the power so there is no need for measures of security yet this line had me amazed at the thought of it! Same with time, it was a good personification that almost seemed mournful, like there is safety but time is still. Really interesting read, the
poets' words were expressive and almost lulling, especially with the ending line. Sleep will not cure all our problems or guarantee us a hide-away from danger. We must live, move on.

That poem really touched me. Loved it you guys :)

Wow.
that was so deep and smart, word-play wise

Loved it..

d whole poem is my fav..

but this part

God is asleep and safe,
time is asleep and safe,
people are acting so asleep
but they are not safe.

Woah, a Like button? That's classy.

Finally, we got to submit this. :)