Down Under

by Ares   Jan 30, 2013


I travel all the woods,
I sleep in every burrow.
Too old to run,
There is no fun,
In dreaming of tomorrow.

The clouds release the water,
My coat withstands the rain.
The night is dark,
From fire a spark,
With song I fight every pain.

I smile at strikes of lightening,
I dance to beats of thunder.
Too drunk to know,
Too eager to show,
That I left myself down under.

I travel all the woods,
I sleep in every burrow.
Too old to run,
There is no fun,
In dreaming of tomorrow.

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  • 11 years ago

    by ah satan 666

    @.@!!!

    I think I sang my way through this...
    Its got a nice rhythm to it...

    I like the usage of woods... As I love forests and wide open spaces...

    This made me want to go travelling again :)

    Nicely penned

  • 11 years ago

    by myonlymoon

    I loved the rhyme pattern you used here. It flowed well! Good job

  • 11 years ago

    by Rusheena

    Nice work, Ares! I love anything set in the woods, and lyric poems are one of my favorite genres of poetry. The rhythm, combined with the setting really adds to your dark story because the repetition makes the speaker seem more mysterious.

    The only thing I'd say is, you're missing the other "o" to the "To" in the third line in the last stanza. I also have a question about the line "I travel all the woods." Since it's not a complete sentence, it thew me off a bit. Did you word it that way, in order to keep your rhythm going? Hope you don't mind my feedback.

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