Now see I didn't rhyme like this when I was younger...this here is good rhyme. Your syllable count is what helps the flow...the story in this is just beautifully sad......if rhyming poems were like this I'd enjoy them :)

Mwah!

The whole poem was really well penned, even down to the perfect syllabification, and effortless rhyme.
The story in the poem is a sad one, and sometimes in poems the rhyme and the whole process of getting it right distracts and limits the emotion in the actual piece but here it didn't, they complement each other well and you once again, as your blooming beautiful self does, wrote another piece that I freaking LOVE

Mwah... x