Behind the Gate

by Chelsey   Feb 3, 2013


I welcome goodbye, as she is the face of something
that never even began, never said hello. I invite her in
because I must end this halted race... The one where
you shot the gun and I haven't even left my gate.

You know I'd run this track in circles until you were
ready to crown me the winner and blanket me with
flowers, but I can't even get started. Your intentions
are unclear and your motives are questioned.

What am I to you? Good company? A distraction?
Comfort in your dreams? Tell me, what is this
here, because quite frankly its becoming a lonely
state of having you, yet being completely without you.

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  • 11 years ago

    by Baby Rainbow

    I like this one Chels, shows how uncertain you are about a relationship and what its true purprose is to the other party involved.

    I liked how it was from the heart and honest and it was like you were trying to decide for yourself if it is worth holding onto or not but you just do not know their intentions.

    I also liked this poem because it can realte to a very rocky relationship and unstable, or it could also just be that the state of mind of the first party is just insecure and this is what it is like in their minds as they constantly worry about everything and fear the future and downfall of what they feel attached to just now.

    Enjoyed this, good job.

  • 11 years ago

    by Poet on the Piano

    Chelsey, this was hauntingly beautiful, the despair and the questions that seem to linger on really speak to me. I loved how you opened it up almost as if you have aged, knowing this goodbye would come, and having acceptance- great personification, it made the hopelessness even stronger....that this goodbye was almost destined, because it knew nothing else. I really liked how you wrote with certainty that maybe if you had some promise by this person, you would have tried to continue this race, this fight. But somehow, this relationship may be twisted, unclear, not moving forward in a way it should. The last two lines were so lyrical in my mind, I felt such emotion!! Your words are chilling because I feel they have authority, you just aren't shouting at this person, you are saying "tell me", you know what they have been doing. The last few lines kind of remind me of the feeling when you can be in a crowd, surrounded by people, but still feel lonely. From what I got, it's that this person is physically your company and fills up your time, but doesn't make some part of your life whole. There are hollows. The depth here gives me tons to think about as there were also countless lines that read to me sadly but also darkly...

    Amazing job = )

  • 11 years ago

    by Wild flower

    This is AMAZING!!!
    You expressed the sadness in a really creative way. So touching, yet I so enjoyed reading it:)
    Awesome job Chels.

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