Duality

Hi rubert

Good writing friend

I really did like this one...although short, it had a very musical tone to it...critique wise..

My heart yearns for beauty
while my mind ticks along.

The complexities of a rainbow
the simplicity of a song.

Each colour vibrant yet defined
each note sung suddenly escaping time.
^^^

This line is slightly longer that the others and interupts the flow a bit...would you consider dropping the word suddenly? Also...normally, I'm not a fan of sentences starting with the same word but....it works here perhaps because I felt the musical part?

What is love that I may find it.

What is art if not inspired by it.

Really you should have question marks after each of these sentences but....I'm not a great lover of putting them in myself...technically they should be there but...my arguement is...most will know they are questions and...they always distract me so..I'd leave them out :)

All that is left is nuts and bolts
while the rain corrodes the glimmers of hope.

All that is left 'are'nuts and bolts...

Honestly...that's it!....for your first poem it's exceptionally good....looking forward to reading some more from you....welcome to the site BTW!

Flows like a song. Do you ever write music?

Man, what a marvelous choice of words for your first ever poem. I honestly love this! Nice work! <3

Welcome to P&Q, btw :D

Congrats on your first poem! Man, this piece is a gem for your first attempt.

Good luck and welcome to the site! :)