What a sad poem this is, cancer is a monster:/
This is great, aeesome poem!!

PS: I think I forgot how to comment:)

You nailed this form hon, it flowed so naturally. And the emotions were there in every word, its so hard to see your loved ones in pain...

Love you <3

xxx

First let me say, you nailed this form... the rhyming was perfect and it flowed beautifully. I've not seen this form before, but dang woman, you've done an excellent job here.

Second, this is literally heartbreaking, so much emotion within this write. You told of how cancer not only affects him but also you... as one who has battled this disease (not nearly half as bad as him) and watched others battle it, it's a mean nasty thing and it's so hard to try to be strong, for all involved. as Flower called it, Monster, wish they'd finally find a cure. This is a tear jerker... hugs you!!

I absolutely loved this Andrea. My best friend Tyler (my muse and my biggest inspiration) has recently been going through tough times, and had been battling his depression with various drugs, like prescription meds... This shook me on a very personal level. I'm actually gonna share this with him I think... I talk to him about you guys all the time (: This was so well written and I enjoyed reading every bit of it. Well, well done!!!

Oh my, I just read your funny piece about James...and then this....ugh, back down to earth with a bump.

This was absolutely heartbreaking stuff, it was mega deep, just totally caught me and I got a lump in my throat...

I have never seen this form of poetry before...but by gosh, you nailed it...You really got the flow right and the emotion was still really obvious and the piece was powerful and deep...you absolutely gave me tears, and at the same time left me open mouthed at the whole piece

Hugs to you both

x

VERY nice, Andrea! I've never heard of this form before, but I think I'll have to try it out one day. I like when end rhymes aren't in traditional order, and your story made it flow really well.

Nominated....................

Andrea, I read this a few days ago and just found it again because I wanted to leave a comment. First I wasn't sure if I was going to say anything but I want you to know how much this touches me. My grandpa suffered from pancreatic cancer. The times I went after school I don't regret because although it was hard to see him deteriorate, it's something I needed to do. When you wrote about wanting him to take a bite but him never being hungry, that got to me, that was so...spot on. I think we all wonder why can't there be a cure for cancer, or a less painful way to pass away? So sorry for your suffering...I really wish I could give you a hug, I'm sorry about whoever this person is and their relationship to you, nothing is easy but there's always strength within us, even if we can't find it sometimes.

P.S. Like the others who've commented, I'd never seen/heard of this form before and you did amazing, you really showed the beauty of the form probably better than many could!

@.@!!!

You know Andrea, I'm going to
have to try this form... the flow
Works well with the tone of this
Write.

It is I, that is now struggling to comment.
This topic hits many so hard...

My heart goes out to you <3

A poem of reality. The wording revealed the pain and how it touches everyone. Excellent

How nice it is to come across a form in the weekly contest that I haven't seen before. It is fairly simple but it is very effective. Maple tree has taken a subject that is close to so many people and written a gem. There is huge emotion in this, but interestingly it reads as written from the point of view of the person helping the sufferer not the person with the cancer themselves. It shows how this can effect everybody close to the person diagnosed.
The rhyme scheme works very well, as expected by this writer it is not only unforced it is also very clever. Both 'dancer' and 'answer' can be pronounced slightly differently dependent on your accent.
(think dar-ncer or dan- cer)
I awarded this 7 points because I felt stanza 1 was so abrupt and 'matter-of-fact' I felt the frustration in this, well done.