Nyctophobia

I always find myself pulled in to poems that talk about some kind of phobia, I always wonder what the writer can make with it, and how creative he can be thats why I found your title so interesting..

The dark, mysterious, and twisted tone in it was superb. And you know what, I think that with a little bit of extra work this idea you adopted in this poem could easy be transformed into a bestseller novel, or thats how I honestly felt!

Clever way to open this piece with the idea of childhood fear; a fear of the dark which I think most kids have. And like many the imaginary part of our brains make us see things in the dark, things that may not even exist!

You took your time with the first part of the poem. You gave the reader enough insight to understand the place you came from; your own childhood fears. But then in the second half of the poem things changed. You were smart to change the idea of how darkness made you feel. Its like you showed us two different point of views; how darkness is seen by a child and how it's seen by an adult.

I also favor poems that add a little bit of romance while being dark..
"I would want nothing more than you
in all the world, my beautiful love,
you have been the first and will be
the only one to ever touch my heart."
^^
and those lines you added made a lot of difference and added more to the piece.

But I never expected that ending to be honest, what a twist! It was very clever.

I agree with meme,
this is like a novel..

Your poems take us places only the heart could go. Each word, each line is perfection

Are you a great novelist in disguise?! Because the story line of this piece is simply perfect!

Amazing write girl :)

Does "Perfect" suffice?
The title hints to the psychiatric side of the story which is reflected in the very last word. Let's start, however, with the beginning which gave goosebumps to my goosebumps. It felt as if a narrator in a movie is speaking, and there is fog and fear all around; it felt really dark and scary!!! The fear of night was originally shed light on through brilliantly precise feelings. I wonder who the writer is. Can't wait to know his/her name :) Of course I gave this a full mark because of the twist which came at the very end (just the way it should be, IMO) - TOTALLY unexpected, and somewhat funny at the same time, with the marvelous cinematic addition of the therapist at the end. [25/25 Points ]