I LOVE it.
Especially the 2nd half.

a bit 'of' air in stead of 'if'

OMG!!

Your old way of writing is back!! This is so strong and amazing and the metaphors are one of a kind.

You blew my mind Nana <3

xxx

Great to see this piece from you. The amazing metaphors and total heart tugging expressions.
Such a powerful piece...

Love ya Nana
x

Wow, this is an outstanding poem, I love the style you have in it, Wonderful poem