I truly loved the fifth stanza, very strong imagery here. I fell in and out of rhythm in this poem but I enjoyed the story.

"Even his twinkling baby blues went two shades dim."

Great picture in this sentence, I felt this line, keep it up!

I loved the story so much, it's interesting! The last two stanzas are sorrowful.
A loveable work.

Listened to "Where did you sleep last night" while reading for full effect. Your other poem I read had a Nirvana feel, too, come to think of it. If you've never read Kurt Cobain's journals, I recommend doing so. It matches some of the tone of your work. The rhyme scheme gets a little weak at a few points, but that is by no means the main focus of this poem. You're such a talented narrator. 5/5

Really interesting write Rusheena!

I have one small suggestion...in rhyming pieces, the flow is pretty crucial so the reader can have a smooth read...to help with that its easier to make sure your syllable count is almost the same in every line.

I found this poem to be intriguing...and yet, creative since you were inspired by two things to write it. Makes me wonder where his body was? Somewhat creepy..

well done girl!