Damaged Goods (Sonnet)

by Stephen   Feb 13, 2013


Secrets buried within glistening eyes
veil malcontent using her vibrant smile.
Tarnished by heartbreak she's severing ties,
retracting love, and becoming hostile.

Shattered perceptions of love she once knew,
consumed by bliss as two souls became one,
cause downpours of tears as feelings once true
became spurious, their love has no sun.

Future now obscure and heart beating faint
she's reluctant of a new beginning.
Downright weary of men, feelings restraint,
chances to soothe her are always thinning.

Does hope remain? All I need is a chance
to shower her with love, care, and romance.

**(First attempt at Sonnet, please let me know if it's written correctly & what could be fixed, TY in advance.)**

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  • 11 years ago

    by L

    Very good, you got the rhymes and the syllable counts.
    Now just focus on the iambic pentameter which is the sound each word has.

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    The second syllable is more stressed.. It's tough to understand and find which ones are more stress than the others :-s but it takes a lot of practice.

  • 11 years ago

    by Khalid M Darwish

    You wrote a marvelous piece with an enchanting rhyming system, Stephen! I guarantee that you'll be able to compete with high levelled poets in future. I encourage you to pen more pieces like this. You proved that you're excellent in formed poetry and I'm proud of you.

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