Frozen [Haiku]

by Rusheena   Feb 14, 2013


Snowflakes fall like tears
onto the gray lake. Silence,
the eclipse is here...

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  • 11 years ago

    by Daylight Lucidity

    Incredibly beautiful and well put together ;) I like it

  • 11 years ago

    by Khalid M Darwish

    Nice similes between snowflakes and tears. I loved it. The watcher can notice their sequential slow falling and relate that with feeling. Great poem.
    N.B.: The syllable count of the 2nd line is 6 and should be 7.
    Great attempt!

    • 11 years ago

      by Rusheena

      Oh yeah, I was suppose to fix that. Thanks!

  • 11 years ago

    by Baby Rainbow

    I really like the flow in this one, it seems to be over so fast that you have to read it again, then again, then again. I love it!

    The snowflakes and tears indicate sadness which is often related to winter and the weather and the bitterness etc. Worked really well, good job again.