Enjoy the World Display [Tanka]

by Khalid M Darwish   Feb 14, 2013


We erect the world
it collapse then erect it
and then we collapse
The wise is that who enjoys
the shows displayed by the world

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  • 11 years ago

    by Rusheena

    I love the message, but I got a little lost on the second and fourth lines. I think "collapse" should have a "s" on the end. I know you were trying to keep the syllable count, but you could try "it collapses then erects". For the fourth line, you could try: "The wise are those who enjoy". Just a suggestion, but I still really liked it.

  • 11 years ago

    by xXx Eternal PainxXx

    Lol cute and small! :) 5/5

    Queen Ashlin