Comments : Stupid, Stupid Self (Double Etheree)

  • 11 years ago

    by Maple Tree

    Ok- On a technical note, you ROCKED this double etheree! Very flowy and eye catching! Now- on an emotional note, I have felt these same emotions more than I care to count... very touching piece, to be able to pour your emotions within a formed piece... wonderful!

  • 11 years ago

    by Tara Kay

    Oh I love this, I feel like your talking to me here, Lol. Though I know you're own thoughts are evident.
    It's a really powerfully simple poem, and I love this form, you pen it so well.

    :)

  • 11 years ago

    by Rusheena

    Nice presentation. I'm not familiar with etherees, so I'll take Andrea's word for it. It looks like a slop that has come full circle, if that makes any sense. I like the repeated words; I think think repeated words and phrases shows the reader what state of mind the speaker is in, and in this case, I think the speaker is has used these words too many times in her life. I really like your wordplay.

    "Foaming at the mouth with
    words that are twisted; backwards."

    These are my favorite lines. The imagery makes me think that the speaker's sanity is waning, if she has any left, and it really adds to the moral of this poem.

    It's awful to get caught in the cycle of a bad relationship or repeated picking the wrong partner. I've seen many people do it, and it never ends well. Good read, Chelsey :)