Toys (Cascadent)
by Meena Krish Feb 20, 2013
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11 years ago
I like toys since I have many kids. In some places you look like annoyed of toys "please get away from me" but I can't imagine my house without toys.You know, my kids fight for having toys allaround them although I don't agree with them but you can see the real happiness in their faces. You smacked it when you chose the appropriate poetry form. I might try it someday. You are brilliant, you rocked it.
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11 years ago
I like toy since I have many kids. In some places you look like annoyed of toys "please get away from me" but I can't imagine my house without toys.You know, my kids fight for having toys allaround them although I don't agree with them but you can see the real happiness in their faces. You smacked it when you chose the appropriate poetry form. I might try it someday. You are brilliant, you rocked it.
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11 years ago
Very Nicely Done Meena!!
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11 years ago
by Exostosis
Oh you and Raj are good with forms.
The form is good. I am so hesitant with forms.
But here, it isn't just about the form or just toys. It has to do with the memories. You get mad at children for randomly dispersing the toys. They get in the way of your routines. You are setting up the table, bringing the food from kitchen to the table and a toy gets in the way and you get irritated. You love your kids, but you could have tripped and the food could be all over the floor. They are everywhere. There is a shortage of space at times, to store the toys. Children see a toy and they want it. They play with it for a few days and it is just another toy in the pile. But as the children grow up, the toys lessen. You look at the closet and think to yourself, how fast did they grow up.
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11 years ago
by Angie
(Weekly Contest Comment - 2/25/13)
What an interesting form, I love formed poetry and I've not seen this one before. I like how the writer explained the form at the end, thank you for that. The topic was perfect, toys, something I think all of us moms and some dads too I'm sure, can really relate to. We do want our children to have fun and enjoy their toys but we also like to keep a clean house and expect them to clean up after themselves, so to have the toys spill from the closet, priceless... love the realness of this piece, it flowed well and you nailed the form Meena (4)
