Meena, you nailed the form and love the content. Toys do seem to take over a house when there are children. It seems that the toys come alive and move around the house at will. Well done.

Meena, I really like this poem. A playful poem about a moms obsession with toys being everywhere. The form is new to me with how you wrote it. I like how you approached the subject. You used a lot of imagery in your poem as well, which I found nice since it adds to the readers envisioning of the scenery of you walking around with toys laying everywhere and how funny your kids are at hiding(cleaning) up their toys. Great job and keep writing!

This is a wonderful and fun poem. Very playful and takes me back to when my kids were younger. Thanks for sharing.

zach

Great form and awesome poem

Poetry
introduces us to a new world

Poetry
dwells in everyone's soul

Poetry
incites our heart to speak in words

Poetry,
never leave us alone

Poetry
is the language of love

Oh Poetry
can speak in different tongues

this Poetry
one cannot get enough,

See I am here reading poetry about toys
I am here picturing toddles running away
as Meena krish opens her closet door.

There is nothing better to ease the soul like
Poetry Poetry Poetry!

^^^

This is fun, I enjoyed your poem.

So love this poem and form by you Meena! You have excelled!

Great job :))
~ Olwin

(Weekly Contest Comment - 2/25/13)

What an interesting form, I love formed poetry and I've not seen this one before. I like how the writer explained the form at the end, thank you for that. The topic was perfect, toys, something I think all of us moms and some dads too I'm sure, can really relate to. We do want our children to have fun and enjoy their toys but we also like to keep a clean house and expect them to clean up after themselves, so to have the toys spill from the closet, priceless... love the realness of this piece, it flowed well and you nailed the form Meena (4)

Oh you and Raj are good with forms.

The form is good. I am so hesitant with forms.

But here, it isn't just about the form or just toys. It has to do with the memories. You get mad at children for randomly dispersing the toys. They get in the way of your routines. You are setting up the table, bringing the food from kitchen to the table and a toy gets in the way and you get irritated. You love your kids, but you could have tripped and the food could be all over the floor. They are everywhere. There is a shortage of space at times, to store the toys. Children see a toy and they want it. They play with it for a few days and it is just another toy in the pile. But as the children grow up, the toys lessen. You look at the closet and think to yourself, how fast did they grow up.

Very well written.

Very Nicely Done Meena!!

I like toy since I have many kids. In some places you look like annoyed of toys "please get away from me" but I can't imagine my house without toys.You know, my kids fight for having toys allaround them although I don't agree with them but you can see the real happiness in their faces. You smacked it when you chose the appropriate poetry form. I might try it someday. You are brilliant, you rocked it.

I like toys since I have many kids. In some places you look like annoyed of toys "please get away from me" but I can't imagine my house without toys.You know, my kids fight for having toys allaround them although I don't agree with them but you can see the real happiness in their faces. You smacked it when you chose the appropriate poetry form. I might try it someday. You are brilliant, you rocked it.