Locked out of heaven

by Saerelune   Feb 24, 2013


I wake up within yellow bars, bones
yellowed like newspapers in sunlight, dreams
imprisoned behind yellow teeth, a yellow glow
of urine lying near my feet - yellow.

They tell me to get up.

Hands pull at my sleeves,
pull out my heart,
plug my vena cava into

a brighter beat, a lighter melody,
as if asking me for a dance.

But nothing dances. Shadows only dance
at night, when bars become white
like a virgin's sheets, white
like corpses beneath moonlight.
And I tell them.

I tell them that I was born on earth for a reason,
that the sea strands on beaches because the horizon
isn't meant to be an asylum for sadness.

But they aren't listening, they rather watch
all that's yellow outshine my nightsky, just because
that's all they're taught to dream about.

So I tell them that hospital sheets have never felt
more close, or distant, from heaven. I tell them
that the shadows are dancing at last.

Written for Colm's 7-day contest: Day 3.

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  • 11 years ago

    by Britt

    I am in awe when I read your work, and this poem is definitely the reason why..

    I, too, love the repetition of yellow - it brought the "insanity" to the poem and set the tone. I pictured the first stanza being read in Jack Nicholsons voice.

    The last half of the poem was really beautiful, I feel a nervous rush of babbling, coherently though, like you know what you're saying, you know you're right, and you know if they would just listen to you that the world would all make sense again.

    This poem made me think so much.. you really are incredible.

  • 11 years ago

    by xXx Eternal PainxXx

    But nothing dances. Shadows only dance
    at night, when bars become white
    like a virgin's sheets, white
    like corpses beneath moonlight.
    And I tell them.
    ^^^that stanza was my favorite and the last one girl! :) i loved it i mean the first poem held too much similes but i really liked them also it made me laugh a bit lol XP but i really do like the poem and the way the poem flowed was very nice! :) 5/5
    Queen Ashlin

  • 11 years ago

    by Maple Tree

    I've read this a few times now and I truly love the repetition of yellow here... Its mixed within and though out the entire piece... love that... makes me think of Light for yellow is the symbol of light in my opinion... and a feeling of being close to death but reaching for the light... this is beautiful!

  • 11 years ago

    by Courageous Dreamer

    I agree with Myryn, so hard to find the words to say! I think you did an excellent job making us feel the scene of a patient within a hospital room and how you strung some positive thoughts within something often sorrowful. The whole thing just seems so real. The repetition of yellow did in fact do wonders for the opening lines. Also, I love how you tied the title in, and how you said you've never been so close or far away to heaven, that was a lovely lovely line. Well done!

  • 11 years ago

    by The Queen

    Same here, can't say much but just excellent. Funny, how I love your poems but when it comes to commenting, I can't seem to figure out what to say.

    On the other hand, I love the repetition of "yellow" here. The title really suits the poem, especially the ending lines. Love it!

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