Same here, can't say much but just excellent. Funny, how I love your poems but when it comes to commenting, I can't seem to figure out what to say.

On the other hand, I love the repetition of "yellow" here. The title really suits the poem, especially the ending lines. Love it!

I agree with Myryn, so hard to find the words to say! I think you did an excellent job making us feel the scene of a patient within a hospital room and how you strung some positive thoughts within something often sorrowful. The whole thing just seems so real. The repetition of yellow did in fact do wonders for the opening lines. Also, I love how you tied the title in, and how you said you've never been so close or far away to heaven, that was a lovely lovely line. Well done!

I've read this a few times now and I truly love the repetition of yellow here... Its mixed within and though out the entire piece... love that... makes me think of Light for yellow is the symbol of light in my opinion... and a feeling of being close to death but reaching for the light... this is beautiful!

But nothing dances. Shadows only dance
at night, when bars become white
like a virgin's sheets, white
like corpses beneath moonlight.
And I tell them.
^^^that stanza was my favorite and the last one girl! :) i loved it i mean the first poem held too much similes but i really liked them also it made me laugh a bit lol XP but i really do like the poem and the way the poem flowed was very nice! :) 5/5
Queen Ashlin

I am in awe when I read your work, and this poem is definitely the reason why..

I, too, love the repetition of yellow - it brought the "insanity" to the poem and set the tone. I pictured the first stanza being read in Jack Nicholsons voice.

The last half of the poem was really beautiful, I feel a nervous rush of babbling, coherently though, like you know what you're saying, you know you're right, and you know if they would just listen to you that the world would all make sense again.

This poem made me think so much.. you really are incredible.