Outskirts Of The Mind

by The Queen   Feb 24, 2013


He is the epitome
of rich tradition,
of lordly manners,
and medieval romance.

though in darkness, he is but
a musical mourner whose ritual laments;
mellifluous, as that of a siren.

A night songstress.

He seeks solace in the hairiest of woods,
while I, a fragment of a revolutionary thought,
seek for words that have backbone or spine
only to withstand a world I could not own.

We would often meet atop the dreamy,
scaling sycamore limbs at every breaking dawn;
hung-over from the bucket list that revolves
around wines and prescriptive dreams.

But as dusk arrives, so shall dawn -
soon, everyone will know us,
as I lay still, covered in fractured shards

of reality that exists within a broken mind.

Copyright (C) 2013 by EvanescentMoon.
02.05.13

*written for Colm's 7 - day challenge. Day 1

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  • 11 years ago

    by Angie

    (Weekly Contest Comment - 3/4/13)

    This is a little romantic gem of a write, it reminds me of a knighted lord who has a high position in medival times but at night escapes to the solace of the woods where he secretly meets with a common woman, she feels she would never fit into his world, they are a forbidden love... love the word choices and the imagery within this write (4)

  • 11 years ago

    by Saerelune

    "What's mostly admirable about this poem's style is its precise diction: no one word seems to be wasted, every space and word seems to count. Secondly, I must praise its tone, which easily makes the reader float away into some far-off romantic dreamscape. I thought the poem to have a very eccentric/folklore-ish atmosphere, yet still capable of tying its ends to a modern period. I think its secret lies in its double meaning. At first glance, I think anyone would notice the budding romance, perhaps also a glimpse of "opposites attract", late night talks, pouring emotions out, etc. But upon second read, I think I found a second meaning. Talks about dreams (and them remaining dreams), speaks to me about unfulfilled wishes for the future. Perhaps either one of the couple's more ambitious/motivated (seeking backbone and spine) while the other remains content in solace, yet both of them play around in the outskirts of the mind. It's this second layer of the poem that appealed to me while the crisp wording serves as good eye-candy too."

    [Weekly Contest 4-3-2013]

  • 11 years ago

    by TJ Arizona Eagle

    I have to agree with the above, excellent write with romance and wonder

  • 11 years ago

    by Britt

    This actually reminded me a bit of Romeo and Juliet lol. I really loved this piece and noticed myself focusing on the literary gems you placed, probably without even realizing. You have little stints of alliteration here and there that played nicely together without being overdone. Your lines are so descriptive and wonderful. I really, really love this poem. I'm glad Colm had his contest, he drug out some wonderful pieces from you all!

  • 11 years ago

    by Maple Tree

    Oh mercy lady! Now this piece blows my mind!!!!

    I adore the crispness of this piece... it brought me to two lovers in a tree... late at night, talking, laughing, and bonding... and the uncertainty of the future... oh mercy I love this!!

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