Oh mercy lady! Now this piece blows my mind!!!!

I adore the crispness of this piece... it brought me to two lovers in a tree... late at night, talking, laughing, and bonding... and the uncertainty of the future... oh mercy I love this!!

This actually reminded me a bit of Romeo and Juliet lol. I really loved this piece and noticed myself focusing on the literary gems you placed, probably without even realizing. You have little stints of alliteration here and there that played nicely together without being overdone. Your lines are so descriptive and wonderful. I really, really love this poem. I'm glad Colm had his contest, he drug out some wonderful pieces from you all!

I have to agree with the above, excellent write with romance and wonder

"What's mostly admirable about this poem's style is its precise diction: no one word seems to be wasted, every space and word seems to count. Secondly, I must praise its tone, which easily makes the reader float away into some far-off romantic dreamscape. I thought the poem to have a very eccentric/folklore-ish atmosphere, yet still capable of tying its ends to a modern period. I think its secret lies in its double meaning. At first glance, I think anyone would notice the budding romance, perhaps also a glimpse of "opposites attract", late night talks, pouring emotions out, etc. But upon second read, I think I found a second meaning. Talks about dreams (and them remaining dreams), speaks to me about unfulfilled wishes for the future. Perhaps either one of the couple's more ambitious/motivated (seeking backbone and spine) while the other remains content in solace, yet both of them play around in the outskirts of the mind. It's this second layer of the poem that appealed to me while the crisp wording serves as good eye-candy too."

[Weekly Contest 4-3-2013]

(Weekly Contest Comment - 3/4/13)

This is a little romantic gem of a write, it reminds me of a knighted lord who has a high position in medival times but at night escapes to the solace of the woods where he secretly meets with a common woman, she feels she would never fit into his world, they are a forbidden love... love the word choices and the imagery within this write (4)