What's so noticeable of this piece is its pace probably because of its short lines. It is quite fast but at the same time, it gives the reader the impression of a quick kiss. I like it!

I agree with Myryn on the pace.. though when I read it out loud, I read it much slower with an intense pacing/reading. Interesting how different it was when reading to myself and reading aloud! I also kind of thought of a vampire, but I do having Breaking Dawn 2 on my mind lol.