Comments : Revolution

  • 11 years ago

    by Chelsey

    I believe this was for Day 5 love not 7 :)

    Wow this poem, a little bit indescribable. I'm lost for words and had to read it twice to find something to say but its still hard.

    Our breathing-- monitored, our hearts-- checked
    for alien signs, our thoughts-- emptied;

    ^ I absolutely loved that. I felt these details really emphasized your whole point, almost like the poem could have stopped here because I totally got it at this point, however I'm glad you went on.

    Nonetheless, I will massacre this silence
    with my love for times when humanity didn't always
    choose stoicism due to their fear of living
    without reservations, boundaries, secure hearts.

    ^ What the.....that is like star quality wording right here Maryanne....Your way with words, seriously I'm sitting here like what I do I say to that??? Stunning!

    Again, I say I have no words for this, but I thought I'd point out my favorite parts.

    Nominated :)

  • 11 years ago

    by xXx Eternal PainxXx

    You are barely a woman now but even I cannot
    piece you back together, for you are shattered
    and often evade me.
    ^ this is my favorite part! :)