Comments : Royalty

  • 11 years ago

    by Amreen

    This is long but I liked it. The story you said here. Happy endings are always enjoyable:)

  • 11 years ago

    by xXx Eternal PainxXx

    You have reached inside and brought a woman out of this timid young girl.
    you have given more to me than any prince could give me in this world.
    With you i hold my head high, welcoming the sun.
    I shall hold on to every moment with you untill my days are done.
    A wonderful creation from God you are,sent here specifically for me.
    And you will forever have my heart as i yours to keep.
    You are my hero,for you have saved me from myself.
    And for that i see you as pure ROYALTY,without the castle and wealth
    ^^
    that part of your lovely poem nearly made me want to cry cause i'm still waiting for my happily ever after for someone to bring me back to life lol 5/5 good poem! :)

    Queen Ashlin

  • 11 years ago

    by Dark Secrets

    I like it. How you started with imagination and ended with dreams coming true by projecting reality into your imagination.
    However, it's more of a story than a poem. A poem should have rhythm if not rhyme. It is a great start though. Try to space it like a poem and add rhythm by playing with the words like you did towards the end.