Everything but the third and final line to me was okay to me the flow the poem in the two lines were very good but at the third line it didn't seem to end gracefully it seemed a tad forced if i may so say so... sorry but the poem is very nice 4/5

Queen Ashlin

Good work, simple yet informational.

Critique: Make sure you use your breaks.

"The time whizzes by, (comma is needed, before proceeding to the next line. It makes it easier to follow through, since, I believe, the second and third lines says something separately from the first.)

Good job nonetheless. 5/5

Cute little poem, and you you got the syllibale count right, and thats great for someone your age:)

Awesome job!!