Here the loss of an unborn is vivid and heartbreaking. However, the poem is stark in the sense that there is precious little to give perspective. Why is the mother on the concrete? Did she fall or was she a victim of some sort? Did she succumb to cramps presaging a miscarriage?
Also, is she alone for real or is she afraid the baby's father will reject her? When she whispers for the ones she loves, it would be good to know who they are in relation to her so that the story is more personal.

"I was steadily working my way through all of the poems submitted for this contest and whilst a couple others have made me tear up, this was the first one that made me actually stop and cry. Gosh, the heartbreak in this poem is overwhelming and chokes me up as a parent. Because of the fact that it made me break down, I reread and tried to take away any emotions/thoughts I had about this to enable me to comment without any influencing factors. Upon doing this, I found that at first I wasn't so fond of the blunt wording and the little imagery. But going back yet again..and I then decided it was perfect. because, it is blunt. You don't need imagery to percieve the heartache and loss that this tragic event would cause and it's because of this that this poem stood out to me more than any other."