by Dawn Mar 6, 2013
category :
Sadness, depression /
other
He never had perfect prose, |
[Weekly Contest Comment: 3/17/13] |
by Jenni Marie
Oh my my my. What can I say that MA hasn't already?! |
Wow Dawn, I am speechless with this new poem. I feel like I haven't read your poetry in so long and I apologize for that!!! I'm really at loss as to how to respond, there were many lines that stuck out for me. I liked how you talked about change in the way your locker number is not the same, either a year has passed in high school I'm assuming? Different hallways, different grade than you were before. This line caught me "Been moving so fast I'm not even sure that I'm me". I love how you write your thoughts, how you are processing things, and not just explaining this and that to the reader. You put out what needs to be said. This poem read very personal to me and was like a calling of your own memories through this line: "Though I'm not jealous, I'll always find that amber beautiful." That ending with the photograph too was so darn emotional too like looking back is not even worth it anymore....his photograph can't evoke that love anymore nor can it help you heal. Really captivating poem that has so much in it, I can't break it down anymore, just that whole sense of wanting to get away from this man you had cared about is gut-wrenching. I hope as time goes by it does get easier.... Take care :] |
by xXx Eternal PainxXx
Wanted to sail away on my notebook |