Comments : My Life in Pieces

  • 11 years ago

    by Biancas Veil

    I like the start of this it is great hope you get to finish it off

    • 11 years ago

      by Gabriel

      Well here it is I guess after I took a break the first time I wasn't sure how I wanted it so I didn't get around to finishing it for a while. Hope you enjoy though it has taken a bit of a turn from what I first thought it would be like.

  • 11 years ago

    by Kips2.0

    Wow! This is pretty intense, ugly and very sad. I hope things go well for you. :)

    • 11 years ago

      by Gabriel

      Ya after looking at most of your poems I didn't think this was your type of poem, most of yours are bright and uplifting, that's why I didn't ask for the reciprocate, but thanks for the vote anyways.

  • 11 years ago

    by La Reina De Corazones

    Oh my!!! i'm blown away by this poem! :( i'm sorry if it's true since most of mine are it's stories of my life and my favorite part of this great poem would have to be

    So tell me,
    Have you ever lived your life in a box?
    Just staring at the Clocks?
    Watching time tick away?
    Wishing that you were dead the next day?

    Because I have........
    I was lying in my bed,
    waiting, just waiting to be dead,
    when the tragedies of my life kept circling in my head.
    It was my wife, of whom I remembered, every shred;

    Her beautiful face and her pretty smile,
    that not even the Sirens could imitate with all of their guile.
    The love we had, the love we made!
    No matter what, our marriage could not be swayed!

    every part in this poem had so much emotions and the images burns in the soul and mind while reading this poem it's truely something and i hope you keep penning great poems like this! 5/5

    Queen Ashlin

    • 11 years ago

      by Gabriel

      Oh no this doesn't relate to me, I notice that my life is actually quite simple compared to a lot of others on this site, I got it easy, but I like writing sad, depressing, or dark stories, so thanks!

  • 11 years ago

    by CathyButterflyJC

    WOW, THIS IS TRULY AMAZING, I LOVE THIS POEM, IT REALLY SPOKE TO THE SCARS AND GASHES ON MY HEART 100/100

  • 11 years ago

    by WintersAngel

    I really like the flow. My attention was front and center the whole time. My heart actually started racing toward the end! Great poem.