The traveller

Deep, Dark, and captivating this was!

I love this...truly I do, I feel like its this dark story that really speaks a creepy idea if you disect it a little bit.

One of evil, knowing they are doing wrong, knowing they are ran by the devil....yet they almost welcome it...

That is eery.

Wicked write. Well done.

Now this is a dark piece!!! I was glued to every single line! "Lips of hypnosis" ..."satans cologne" ... all kinds of wonderful imagery.

Amazing <3

Very dangerous read... I like it!

Wild .. Dark .. Powerful

Your imagination is beyond extreme in this piece, it gave me chills. You wrote a whole scene in a directors point of view, as if you were watching from afar the things that were happening.

I love it!
xxx

The main thing that stood out to me was the imagery. Your poem's running wild with it! My favorite parts are the second line and the entire last stanza:

"ready to unleash deadly lips of hypnosis."
I'm not sure what "lips of hypnosis symbolize," but I really like the way the it rolls of the tongue. You can really hear the "hiss or sisss" in it, even though you didn't add any onomatopoeia.

"Feeling naked; devoured in essence of
Satans cologne you sit there bathed by
ebony water
knowing,
he will strike again."

Such powerful and thought provoking images. I have so many different interpretations of it, but what I get from it the most is that the victim has given up and given the attacker permission to do with him/her what he will. I don't know if the attacker is male or female, but a male attacker comes to mind, no offense.

I don't quite get the colon placement in the second stanza, but I'm not very good with punctuation, anyway. There's a comma missing for "Satans", and the placement of the last stanza threw me off a bit. But other than that, I think you did a great job.