Checkmate

Superb piece, Jenni!
You have a message here, and you delivered it brilliantly.

My only comment would be the unnecessary repeating of "So I repeat: ...." in the end. It would be great if it ended with dangerous.

But anyway, it's still an opinion :p

- Excellent

Once again very sad, he is indeed hurting more than one person in this situation. You'd think he would want the best for his son, apparently not. It's depressing. Not sure why some men have to be so downright cruel, especially when it comes to something like this. These kinds of games are not meant to be played, ever. Love the poetic side of this however, the chess metaphor is a lovely one, checkmate being like the last step before surrendering almost. Like you're so close to winning/losing, yet you will never win or lose, because like you said there is no winner. Just remember that you are the better person here. Ah so many emotions, you can feel your pain all too well. Lovely work as always.

Oh Jenni, the whole affect of this poem gave me chills. I mean to have such a threatening danger always in the sidelines, it's not right for them to still be hurting you and the ones you hold close and love so much. I liked the whole chess analogy and just your powerful voice in this poem --- things have gone too far, and all you want is for these attacks to stop. I can see how it doesn't just affect one person too, I feel that's true for many things, it may directly hits one person but it can damage others by hearing or seeing it.

This was powerful, but really sad as well.

I can feel this is personal to you, and that is evident through the words, because they are strong, but heartbreaking.

You're a lovely person and a great mum, no doubts on that one, and a writer with a huge talent...

x

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Wowsers!!!

Powerful write jenni... this need nominating!

5/5
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