Oh Rusheena I cannot believe this has no comments yet!

I love how it tells a story and in the beginning I was not sure where the story was going so I was interested as to where it would end. My first thoughts was about depression and that lonely cold feeling when you wake up in the morning but you do not want to get out of bed because it is warm and comfortable.

Then when you add the incident of the car accident it explains why he has been lying there. I also find this topic very appropraite with all the news lately about teens being knocked down because they were too busy paying attention to their phone or listening to their music.

I find the deepness of this poem very touching - in that he has been poor in the way of money and can't afford the hospital bill - it makes me truly appreciate our health care in the UK.

I was also drawn into his emotional thinking, the desperate thoughts that the ceiling would open up and he would see everything he had been missing. It is also like he is waiting for death too, I got this from the last snowflake falling.

I like the feel of the poem relating to the season of Winter as I could feel this through out all the poem and think it would hit spot on this persons heart and how they felt.

Very creative poem and I like how you got the inspiration, so I have never seen the play but you have opened our eyes to this scene.

The gold fish tank in the end really goes to show how long he has been there, how long he has been unable to care for them properly and so they have just died of hunger or poor hygeine in the tank. Very sad as they probably would have been his only company for a while.

My only uncertainty is "So, I guess I'll just lye here " lye? should be lie or lay? Although not entirely sure which one.

Very deeply touching poem.