Nice work with the challenge on writing a poem using the word Mine. I am not usually a fan of questions in a poem but you have really used them well. You ask the question and give your answer. Makes me think about what in my life is mine, what would I give to others and what would I take. Good job.

I actually like it better with 'me' instead of 'mine'
or you could repeat it with 'me'

you could even throw in a third with 'you'

great write BTW
real sadness, short and straight to the point.

I had to put quite a bit of thought into how I felt about this poem, but I thought you did a good job considering how many times you used the word mine. I personally am not fond of these types of structured poems, but nice work. Thanks for the read.

Let me say this first, good job with the challenge using the word Mine to write a poem :) You did well and this is a poem that will make a reader think for nothing is ours to keep but then there is always a lot to give! Maybe I got the message wrong but that is what I got out of it..excellent work!

Awww....this is so pretty! Great write!:) 5/5

"We all live to live"
More giving than taking you seem to say, must admit its atough poem to crack. Has contradictions within it yet rightfully penned.

I like what you did with the poem, you used some refrains and just changed the last two syllables on the first line of each stanza. For instance, you used the refrain "as what" then you repeated the other refrain "all that is mine in the whole poem" except the last stanza.

Ask what to give.
All that is mine
I will give
with all my heart.

But you also used repetition. Whatever you added at the end of the first sentence of each stanza, you incorporated in the third line of that stanza. For instance in the third stanza "ask what to give" "GIVE" was used in the third line of that same Stanza. And the same procedure was implement for the three stanza. However, the first and second stanza to me sounds smooth, the third one sounds a bit strange, at least to me and the line "beloved cast off mine" sounds strange too. At least to me.

Other than that I enjoy this read.

I love the repetition of the 2nd line as a refrain in each stanza.

The poem goes smooth for lines 1, 2 and 4 in the three stanza. However, I prefer you fix the 3rd line in these stanza to read a constant number of syllables, for example 6 as in the 1st stanza "will pass in a moment".

Ending the poem with:

"Beloved cast off mine
as if it never were."

after the repetition of 3 similar stanza made the poem have a unique style, loveable to the readers. I personally loved it.
Thank you for sharing this with us.

Wow.. I love this poem.