Man, this is one very sad poem you got here, gloomy, more like it. I see youre more into the sad poem thing nowadays. Anyways, good one. Keep up with the writing. Hoping to see more, a happier one maybe?

I like the form and the repetition in this piece. It's absolutely great. The pain just leaks out and cements itself through the poem. The metaphors used are so good.

Ex: The piece of gum
Stuck to the bottom of a shoe
That everyone wants to get rid of

That will probably never be written in another piece of poetry. really unique.
As always, raw and painful.

I love you, doll.