Ocean's Jail

by Saerelune   Mar 18, 2013


With my nose pressed against glass, I'm kissing
turtle heads, neck exposed to fluorescence, almost
burning with the likeness of the sun - damp
and sticky with lollipop-smeared fingerprints,
a trail of fishes seems to slip past my eyes, water
trickling in multitudes, surface collecting bubbles
in its arms, even though there's nothing worth
catching, let alone casting, so I'll just end this
romance by flashing camera lights, another one
of those imitation suns, drifting and disappearing
into the deepest blue of their ambiance.

13-03-2013
11:43 PM

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  • 11 years ago

    by Baby Rainbow

    This was quite a touching poem actually, I did not expect it to be when I first read it. i erad it again and just felt empathy for these little creaturs in the ocean. It reminds me of the film Happy Feet, when the penguins are behind the glass and they can't get out and Mumble ( the penguin ) feels so trapped and helpless.

    Your title is very catching, also fits well to your poem and the meaning of it.

    Nice work.

  • 11 years ago

    by L

    Sorry for this lame comment,

    but I just wanted to say you have a way with words, you create such imagery, I don't know if it was intended but I felt exactly like the comment above said, in an aquarium. Except that I picture a little girl kissing the glass when the turtle got near, lol. It was cute and yeah captivating. And I thought you might have named it Ocean's jail because the turtles and fishes are imprison within a fake ocean.

  • 11 years ago

    by Courageous Dreamer

    Ah don't you just love how beautiful the ocean is & mostly how captivating, hence the 'jail' in your title, which was so clever! The imagery & descriptions are so perfect, it made me feel like I was in a aquarium or strolling by the ocean. It's all packed so nicely into this little poem, literally captivating the reader which each line. Love this!

  • 11 years ago

    by Britt

    Only you could take the prompt and write it into something like this. I love the first two lines.. so creative as always.

    You take normal things and make them different. Kissing turtle heads -- of course you're not but you are. It creates such an image and has great metaphor capability.

    Oops submit too early. ANYWAY, like all your stuff, I adore this poem :)

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