Turning

by Michael D Nalley   Mar 20, 2013


Early one morning the whole world turned around
God said Let there be light and He saw it was good
a shadow was cast, only darkness could be found

Then the Creator made the water and the ground
He saw everything seemed just as good, as it should
The next morning the whole world turned around

God felt there should be eyes that see, ears to hear sound,
Five Senses to man, free will to do what he would,
a shadow was cast, only darkness could be found

Cycles of turning would be accepted, and renowned.
It seems at that point the Creator thought of what He could,
That night over again the whole world turned around

Then there was a snake as it slivered to the ground.
It tempted Eve to consume evil as if it were good,
nothing was the same as the whole world turned around

So it was written mankind's days and nights abound,
though the price would be paid on a cross made of wood.
Early one morning the whole world turned around.
We may now rise above where the shadows are found.

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  • 11 years ago

    by Hannah Lizette

    Villanelle, I see. :)
    Wonderful form, I'm not too adventurous with my forms, I usually don't stray from haiku's, senyru's or acrostics... but I always have respect for someone who takes the time to do these types of forms!

    Wonderful, spiritual message. :)

  • 11 years ago

    by Michael

    Excellent poem i like the flow and description

    i have only 1 critique the words rewound and around lose the flow a little bit for the rhyme

    apart from that excellent poem 5/5

  • 11 years ago

    by Michael

    Excellent poem i like the flow and description

    i have only 1 critique the words rewound and around lose the flow a little bit for the rhyme

    apart from that excellent poem 5/5

  • 11 years ago

    by L

    I'm trying to figure out what it was that it was done on this piece, but I think it's like a villanea.. or a terzalle.. I forget how they are spell.

    But there are 19 lines in total, I know they follow a rhyme scheme and I think it was follow on this one. I like the flow and the story.

    I might be back to leave a better comment, but I can't promise. but Thanks for sharing.

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