Wow! Now that's old school.... I just looked in my closet, it just needs some shelving. Oh man there's a dead mouse!

Just kidding.... absolutely Loved it. Had to look up 'dejection' b/c as a man I'm only familiar with rejection; the word Caps it off perfectly!

Give me more like this, but not too much more ..... yeah

I love dark poetry for its description and feel, this piece is definately not an exception! Wow. Wonderful write.

Welcome to my walk-in closet, 
where the aroma reeks of rotting flesh
and the chipping, charcoal paint 
falls on the remnants of lost souls.

^ i love how you incorperate your title here and use it to grasp your audience. I really like how odd the first line is and how it made me eager to read more.

Step inside my chamber, 
a plethora of shattered dreams,
where the weeping and gnashing of teeth
make your blood run cold. 

^wonderful, a truly "dark" stanza with descriptions. lots of poems use shattered dreams but i like how you didnt stop there but instead you continied on.

Come feast your eyes 
on the chasm of my darkest secrets,
a time capsule of 
torment and afflictions.

^I dont know why, honestly,  but this is my favorite stanza. So simple yet has a massive pull on whether or not to continue reading.

This is my falling House of Usher, 
crumbling at my feet,
that will fill my sickly lungs 
with debris of my dejection. 

^stunning conclusion. Wow. Great job.

Your voice stands out and adds dimention to the piece, great skill. The words were simple mostly but worked with the piece well, nice. Well done

Your wording in this is fantastic. You really do pull of the darkness in your dark poems, honestly.

I think Maple would like this, and I think you two would write an awesome collab for dark section!

Love it! I am really enjoying these.

I love the reference to the House of Usher!
Beautiful poem! It is a little different from what I normally read by you, as it seems like your styles have changed -- like you have said. It's interesting to see how much people change! I love the last line -- it just flows well. C:

I think this flows so beautifully! Great job on this one!

-z